Friday, 26 August 2016

Omypic Moment

 Walt Describe a  in time in detail
I turn the boat then I turn it again. I’m a NZ sailor.   I sail as hard as I can.  The people said good luck and cheered for me. I had sometimes never got beaten. I’m a NZ sailor I have got a gold medal. I wondered if my friends are here.







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  1. Anonymous29 August 2016 at 11:27

    Hi there Reid
    I like the way you wrote the story next time can you use some more similes and onomatopoeia to make it interesting

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  2. Aamaria29 August 2016 at 11:45

    Hi Reid,I really like how you used a question in your writing.One question why did you choose this person and maybe next time tell us the person your talking about.

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